Here it is...not much right now but I am still working on it. :-\

Actually here are two of them.

Which is better? (still mostly a work in progress)

 

Waltz for Technology

 

The whirl of machines drowns out the violin.

Clashing of keys, stroking of mice.

Mirror-like screens present treachery

Clashing of keys, stroking of mice.

 

Draining power, output/input.

Clawing of keys, beating the mice.

Whatever happened to the pen?

Clawing of keys, beating the mice.

 

Giving up the pain of creation.

Smashing of keys, lamenting the mice.

All attempts are futile--technology has triumphed.

Smashing of keys, lamenting the mice.

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The Rain Dancer

 

Sweet summer rain patters overhead,

Dancing in the rain, she's blind to others.

Twisting and turning, yearning to be cleansed.

The rain falls harder on the Rain Dancer,

But she does not stop her dance.

Rain glistens and gleams on her ebony hair,

Waves of wet silk ripple in the night.

 Reaching up to embrace the grey cloud,

Like a mother to child they are together.

She shines for an instant, a moment.

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[email reply from Reani King]

Kelly,

I really like the "Waltz for Technology". I especially, like the reference to the mice, and that the more the person tries the more he/she gets frustrated and becomes more violent with the computer mouse. What did happen to the pen? In the first line of the third stanza "Giving up the pain of creation", does that have anything to do with the computer crashing in the middle of an important assignment? If so, I have been there.

The "Rain Dancer"starts off strong, but I was slightly thrown off by the last line. I do like your use of assonance, and alliteration. Great imagery.

Reani King